He was as fast as using bolt
She was as fast as Jessica ennes
they were out of breath
they had sweat of their heads
These 2 special elements were having a race
they were going in different directions
But what could they be
The sun the moon
When bolts on winning he’s practically on fire
and when Jessica is winning she’s practically lighting up
What could it be I wonder who
July 8, 2013 at 10:38 am
You have used personification through out the poem for example you talk about the sun and the moon being athletic runners like usian bolt and Jessica ennes.
July 8, 2013 at 10:40 am
This is good work really like the start it was was strong and powerful